Hi Greg, I agree with Mary, it felt just a little bit short of personal anecdotes, but your overall message was clear and effective. I would have liked maybe an explanation with another quote expanded on from a philosopher or academic to balance out the piece, too, just me being nit picky though! I also think that your title would snag more readers if you included the "...is on yourself" bit, it sounds a little bit vague without it and maybe not catchy enough to grab a reader who might otherwise click on it. If that makes sense? Just my two cents, titles are my own weakness so I know it's tricky.